Mikayla – Journal 3

When she meets her father, Michael Andretti, for the first time Josie was leaving her grandmother’s house, she opened the door and he was there, after long moments of uncomfortable starring Michael broke the silence by saying “you’re Christina’s daughter?”. They had a short abrupt conversation and Josie left saying “Goodbye Mr Andretti”. When she saw Michael for the second time they had a longer cnversation and it was obvious Josie showed a lot of anger and hatred towards him, she said to him that she never wanted him in her life and that she was happy that he wasn’t there growing up. This changed when Josie got in a fight at school and needed Michale to help get her out of a bad situation. They started talking and hanging out alot more, itis now obvious that she enjoys having her father around.

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One thought on “Mikayla – Journal 3

  1. They started talking and hanging out alot more, itis now obvious that she enjoys having her father around. – a lot is two words. Also this sentence changes tense from past to present. Your paragraph lacked a clear topic sentence and just recounted the story rather than delving into their relationship and how it changed.

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