Michael and Josie – Eva A

On Josie’s second encounter with Michael happened at her grandmother house during a family BBQ. At first, Josie didn’t do much but watch him but then when listening to Michael and Christine talking about her, Josie gets annoyed. Getting annoyed cause her to confront Michael expressing her feelings towards him. Josie then proceeds to be annoyed at her father but then her feelings differ and she realizes that she actually wants her father. Michael and Josie start to bond and like each other.

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One thought on “Michael and Josie – Eva A

  1. your points are good however you lack a clear topic sentence which means that your paragraph has no real structure. You need to have a topic sentence and provide points that support your argument in a clear and logical manner. Also try and use a quote in support as well.

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